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Drink Special
by: Chistery

The Tumbling Downs was on the very edge of town, an off-the-path place where usually a stallion could be found with too many sheets to the wind and a few too many gold coins wasted on mead.  On most nights the Prancing Pony or the Fancy Girdle would be Rarity's first choice, but tonight of all nights, with the village suddenly pizzled in a late-March rain …

That she wouldn't be caught dead looking mangled and upset like this in front of her "social friends", well … it was convenient.

Ambling in, the haggard stark white and dark lavender pony took in the sight of a clean, well-lit tavern.  True to Ponyville form it featured (heavily) dark hardwood floors, smiley-face wooden drink coasters, the fashionable dry-eraser Specials Of The Day list.  The place smelled of cedar and low tobacco notes.  It wasn't posh and not the most popular in town, but the entire bar was eerily empty.

This was fortunate.  Rarity felt a little empty.  It matched, like a tiara and the proper scarf.

"Good evening, Miss Rarity.  You're looking … tired," the young dun stallion Silver Stewart faltered, bright blue eyes nervous.

"Thank you for your kindness, Silver, I'll … I'll just need a minute to collect myself.  Can I have a water with lemon?" Rarity managed, sagging all-fours onto her stool.  Her cheek found her hoof quite comfortable to bury into.

Rarity chewed at her lip.  Can I just have my work duds changed, she asks.  Can I have it less … froo froo, she asks.

The cold rocks glass with lemon wedge appeared at her hoof.  Rarity took it, downing it on one go, spitting back the lemon.

She had come over earlier that day to deliberate over a certain apple-themed dress.  Blond eyebrows had waggled, doubting, judging the fine implied action lines Rarity had chosen for her neck line, radiating away from a pretty face.

The filly had tutted her tongue - against those perfect straight white teeth - at the skirt Rarity had herring-bone structured to show off those curves.  She was "quizzical" at best at the broach she'd chosen to accentuate the perfect symmetry of pectorals Rarity admired.  Rarity so often had seen them working so hard to pick, to reach, to pluck, strong yet supple.

That plebeian was so dismissive of all the simple elegance the dress was crafted for.  There was no comprehension in those laughing eyes of how it symbolized the beauty of fresh blossoms under the sun in the lush green of the orchards --

She had guffawed at the finest "country tartan" Rarity had chosen carefully to bring out those gorgeous emerald eyes - or the special lipstick to go with the outfit, chosen especially to wetten those two kissable lips.

Yet at the end, all that and - "Thank yah kindly Rarity, you're a great pal," leaving a list of terrible suggestions, a dress full of penciled corrections, the faintest smell of apples and ... an ache.

A quiet hem hem broke the purple-haired pony's reverie.

"Can I interest you in a special tonight?"  Silver Stewart asked, raising a worried eyebrow at Ponyville's best seamstress, seemingly-come-apart-at-the-seams.

"Certainly. I have six dresses and- plenty of reason to celebrate, I suppose.  Five friends and all."  Rarity attempted to force cheer. It came out threadbare and worn.

Silver nodded, frown vanishing, "'We have a Trojan Horse, a Fine Zombie, the Applejack Sidecar --"

Rarity felt her ears perk.  Stopping him shortly, "I think I'd like the … the sidecar, thank you."

The stallion nodded.  Mixing and twisting, taking out the martini glass, shaking, blending, taking out the brandy, the right juices, the ample spices, turning and tuning and making something new and diverting, distracting -

A glass appeared suddenly, clear.  The drink was brown and solid, swirling, a rind of lemon resting comfortably in a dark orange bath.  Raising it to her lips, licking away the rough cinnamon sprinkled at the rim, she sipped.

It was cool.  Refreshing.  Cinnamon and apples.  It had an undercurrent of dark that circled her tongue and made its way icy smooth and brandy-hot all the way down.  The lemon only added to the sensation; acids mixed to make biting tang, light yet present.  It was perfectly balanced.  It was bright.  it was explosive.  It was delicious and rough and open and honest and caring and beautiful and had the most adorable laugh --

"Just as I thought," Rarity whispered to herself, embarrassed at welling tears, "Applejack tastes wonderful."
After a very long day, Rarity attempts to find comfort and ease at the bottom of a glass. What she finds ... well ...

(One-sided femslash, oneshot.)
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madman12000 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2011
Poor Rarity, maybe someday.
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TheDashingHero Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I must be the only person in the damn world who supports SpikexRarity. lol While the other pairings like RarityxTwilight, RarityxRainbowdash and in this case RarityxAJ are all wonderfully written and a joy to read, I sure do wish I could find more than ONE fic of SpikexRarity. :/
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useraccount Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Try FimFiction, a fair few over there. Like your favorite bartender, the first one's free: [link]

And another, if you want something short, light, and funny instead: [link]
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doctordapples Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2011
It really does. *sip*

I also can't write a critique, but I really enjoyed this. Its short, its sweet, and it packs a punch. I'll spare you the alcohol metaphors, but I'd love to see more stuff like this that tackles serious emotions while still keeping it spare.
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Zogger568 Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2011  Student Writer
Cute cute cute cuuuttttteeeee!!! I love this!
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DooDawDay Featured By Owner May 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
there is pretty much nothing that I can say that ^ haven't already said
nice quick story
thanks!
^^
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Yamathan Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks for the comment all the same! Cheers!
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Skellow Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011
Fantastic. Truly hanging to the end of every word; it was over before I had known it to begin.
You have the talent of an excellent writer. There's no doubt in my mind that I will be reading and loving everything you've written here.
Do you write anywhere else, by chance?
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:iconyamathan:
Yamathan Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2011  Student Writer
Well, yes, kind of. I submit a lot of things to Equestria Daily, but there are a lot of overlaps with deviantart.

Thank you for your very kind words. I'm super-glad you liked it!
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Skellow Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2011
It seems so long ago that I read this.....I had to re-read. Also add to Faves, of course. Sorry about the Extreme Lateness of this Response.
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FinalEnix Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2011
I want a Rainbowdash shot
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:iconyamathan:
Yamathan Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2011  Student Writer
Oh, I've made one. They're delicious. :3

Renard knows how to do it right!
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FinalEnix Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2011
cool
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Solaris90 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Simple, yet elegantly so. No spelling or grammatical errors as far as I can see, and kept well within character. *nods* Yep, this is the best MLP unrequited love story I've read all week, maybe longer.
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Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. This is my first story in the fandom.

Do you have any stories in your favorites I should know about? I've been looking for more unrequited to read!
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Lurks-no-More Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2011
Cannot write a Critique as I'm not a premium member, but here's my impression of the story.

Rarity's mix of frustration and longing is quite touching and makes one sympathize with her. The elaborate descriptions of places and things seem very fitting, too, considering her artistic talent and eye for beauty. The finish, with the descriptions of two different applejacks melding into one another, works really nicely.

All in all, a short but very poignant story.
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Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. I love thorough and kind reviews.

I can't believe this is my shortest story by time spent and by length. A week ago this was my Everest; writer's block had me screwed.
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Auraion Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011
It's sad that there won't be a happy ending
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Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011  Student Writer
Rarity will have her happy ending.

Just not tonight, worn and tired and pining. There are no happy endings on those nights, not nearly ever.
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Auraion Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2011
>Applejack starts drinking because she knows she'll never have a fancy missy like Rarity
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Shad-Phoenix Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011
It was excellent. The last line certainly was perfect.
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Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. It was the anchor for this piece.
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Badgerhead Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011
Poor Rarity :(
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Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011  Student Writer
She'll be fine. It's always darkest before dawn.

You know, 'before dawn,' at 12:30am when no one is around and all you can think of is how terribly you want that one person in your life ...
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Badgerhead Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2011
Yeah I guess that's true :(
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Priderage Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011
As I said on the chan where I found this, it's like a short, powerful shot of awesome. Very fond of it.
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EbonMane Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
Extremely well done, Yam.

I'm a sucker for unrequited love.
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:iconyamathan:
Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011  Student Writer
That means a lot coming from the author of Three Notes.

Thank you, EbonMane.
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Lawn-Pygmy Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
Like a good drink, it leaves you wanting another.

Can't be last call for this, can it? We were only just getting started!
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:iconyamathan:
Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011  Student Writer
It's not last call for pony alcohol, but Rarity should finish her whiskey or beer.

... She has dresses to finish.
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Lawn-Pygmy Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011
No more drinks, then? Awww...
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:iconyamathan:
Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011  Student Writer
Oh, there'll be more drinks - just not in direct continuity with this story.
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Lawn-Pygmy Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011
Now I'm really thirsty. Can't wait to see what you serve up next!
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splash-blue Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
A very good story, but also slightly disappointing in that it won't be continued.
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Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011  Student Writer
Rarity will have more adventures. Just not as a direct sequel.

Point being I did this mostly as a writing exercise; I should start on new things.

Thank you very much for commenting!
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RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
I love this ever so much...
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Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. I enjoy your work very earnestly, and I'm glad you liked this.
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RoyGBiv-MLP Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011
You flatter me far too much! I enjoy your story, too! I wonder, if there's a sequel, would you serve a pink pony?
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Yamathan Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2011  Student Writer
Iiiiii've considered it.
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